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01 Eragon. Home · 01 Christopher Paolini - Inheritance 01 - Eragon This book has been optimized for viewing at a monitor setting of x pixels. This book is dedicated to my mom, for showing me the magic in the world; to my dad, for . Despite that, Eragon did not fear the Spine—he was the only hunter. Despite that, Eragon did not fear the Spine — he was the only hunter near Carvahall "It's odd, Eragon, that you should pick up this book, ^Dominance of Fate.

December 15, Ahead of them, the Shade heard a clink as something hard struck a loose stone. Part of it is just lack of life experience like not knowing that words that are synonyms still have nuances that set them apart, and using the wrong one can have hilarious, probably-unintended implications , part of it is odd stylistic choices seriously, a scent that would change the world? The pages were rewritten on a computer document afterwards by his mother. The first book in the series, Eragon , was originally self-published by Paolini in , and subsequently re-published by Alfred A. Use Omniscience Wisely A tall Shade lifted his head and sniffed the air.

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Actions Shares. Embeds 0 No embeds. No notes for slide. Eragon The Inheritance trilogy to download this book the link is on the last page 2. Description pages. Carte et dessin en noir et blanc en frontispice. Cover by John Jude Palencar. The horned monsters came out of the forest and hemmed her in, blocking the only escape routes….

As the Urgals surged forward, the elf pulled open the pouch, reached into it, and then let it drop to the ground. In her hands was a large sapphire stone that reflected the angry light of the fires. She raised it over her head, lips forming frantic words.

Why lookie here, Paolini does know how to narrate spellcasting without making up silly words. He just chooses not to. Also, put that Shade dialogue in a new paragraph where it belongs… or die. We also have a couple phrases that have been weakened by making them secondary to the action. A ball of red flame sprang from his hand and flew toward the elf, fast as an arrow. But he was too late. A flash of emerald light briefly illuminated the forest, and the stone vanished. Then the red fire smote her and she collapsed.

The Shade hollered in rage… He shot nine bolts of energy from his palm—which killed the Urgals instantly…. The Shade can casually shoot energy bolts from his palm that kill people. Why did he need the Urgals again? Besides simply making his enemies and everything around them explode in fire, he could have just shot energy bolts at them and taken the stone. The entire point of a prologue like this one is to set up the threat of the story. How does watching him lose do that?

Paolini would have done better by showing The Shade succeed at a smaller goal, and then cackle about how he will soon have the stone or something. That is, assuming he bothers to explain what the stone can do, so we know what the stakes are. Miraculously, Arwen is still alive. Apparently the big red fire that downed her horse was just a sleep spell. The prologue ends with the Shade grabbing his horse out of no where and taking her as his damsel.

I imagine it will be up to the chosen one to rescue her — but why should readers care? Need an editor? How stories like that managed to be published? The market was not as saturated like today?

It is true that today we have more information and opportunity to correct errors with so many in this world of books.

I see you have so many good tips that your stories should be awesome! And readers craving another Tolkien, Harry Potter, or Buffy might overlook flaws too. He wrote it when he was 14 for a writing assignment. Published it when he was 15 and toured with it until it got enough attention that the big six took notice and he got picked up for a publishing contact. However, they should have edited it better once big six got ahold of it.

Interesting though that he had such a work ethic that young. Have you seen the size of those books? Clunky prose, or not he worked hard, and did something adults struggle to do. I think Eragon is okay but once you thoroughly analyze it it seems like the modern Sword of Shannara.

I never could get into it, it reminded me of Tolkien too much and I never liked his work either. To be fair I only got a few chapters in before I was putting it down and the people I spoke to who read it enjoyed it.

It was the only series that kept my dad reading even though he hates reading. But It bugs me when younger writers praise him, like they do Tolkien for being the best fantasy writers out there. In my writing group I see this way to often. But can you argue with a mass of young writers and authors who hate diversity. Thanks for the article! Tolkien has its strong points and its weak points — as many very popular works receiving praise do. I just finished Lord of the Rings, but it was my second attempt, and I only managed because I knew and liked the story from the movies.

A huge core message found in the books is the value in simplicity, peace, friendship, and compassion. I am sure drawn out battles would have personally been difficult for him to write as he despised war. Also, battles arent really that interesting.

If you read A Song Of Ice And Fire, very fer words are spent on soldiers trading blows its the build up and the aftermath that are that are interesting. Of course battles are interesting. They are the focal points of the story, the points in time where the characters win or lose, live or die. Tolkien had a propensity to gloss over these moments without ever justifying them.

But it gets almost nothing in terms of page count. Coupled with the overly descriptive, flowery dialogue and you find the biggest flaws with those books. There are certainly many people that are turned off by them, even though he created modern fantasy. LotR also needed a really good, hard editing. You could almost condense it down to a single if thick novel.

Easier for a movie or TV series, because humans are visual animals and can take in a battle shown much better than a battle described. This failure is the primary reason that some have written millions of words and woven hellishly complex plots yet failed to achieve anything nearly as powerful as his effects.

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First, he worked his backgrounds out in enormous detail and so had plenty of details to choose from when he needed to present something from the past. By comparison even the biggest names of the contemporary fantasy genre are lazy; their backgrounds tend to be sketches.

And it shows. Second, Tolkien almost never uses that background to explain anything but rather puts it to artistic use creating more questions and mystery. The huge amount of detail he has available allows him to present just the right details to accomplish this. I immensely enjoyed this book while growing up. Little do you know that you have just read the opening scene of Star Wars: A New Hope in fantasy form. On another note, I would totally read your Eragon rewrite, fixing his tendency to tell not show and write with a thesaurus at his elbow, among other things.

Please provide…. That makes a scary amount of sense. I was hoping they were smell-related. Boy wakes up, smells whatever it was that alerted the Shade, and discovers that he is the one chosen to smell the… smell.

Since he was in his teens when he started writing the story, all his characters think, feel, and react like teenagers. Which is okay for characters like Eragon who actually is a teenager, but for his supposedly elderly mentor and his elf girlfriend it comes off as a little ridiculous. This is also the main reason why the Shade is so not scary.

He reacts to failure pretty much like a toddler if toddlers could shoot fire from their hands. He strikes out randomly, killing his own allies out of spite. So I know from the get go that unless the hero is totally incompetent, this guy will be pretty easy to defeat. A few chapters in and what do you know?

The hero is totally incompetent. You need practice to write a really good book. The genre has enough trouble getting respected in the world of modern literature. But what you need most of all is life experience and emotional maturity.

Thank you— especially for the correction examples. I agree that these are flaws in the book, though your criticism is a bit harsh. I figured you were a writer yourself, so you must know about how difficult it can be and that everyone makes mistakes. Constructive criticism is not the same as criticism used for the sake of hurting someone, it instead helps us to learn from our mistakes, shows us things from another perspective, etc.

A passionate writer knows that constructive criticism, given well, can be one of the most helpful tools they can receive far, far better then praise as it helps the writer see their work from a fresh perspective, reflect on it, and so grow as a result.

Harsh constructive criticism is the best kind, free from sugar-coated delusion which serves no good purpose; After a while you develop a thicker skin anyway, especially when you begin to see the results of your newly applied knowledge. This is a book that someone thought was good enough to publish, and made bazzillions of dollars.

Thank you, though, for pointing out that Christopher Paolini, who might have had the core of a decent story in there somewhere, really needed a serious editor and about five or six more years to grow up. The most hilarious article I have read in a very long time.

How easy it is for a bunch of no names in the writing world to critique another who found success. It must be much harder for them to find success.

I know many a young adult who devoured his books and perhaps he did not find the need to over-complicate his books for an audience that would in large, never understand or appreciate all the adult idiosyncrasies you imply the book is missing.

The basics are there with a highly entertaining story that obviously hit a note for both its intended audience and movie makers. This was a meager attempt to sound more knowledgeable and successful than is reality and nothing more.

It worked for him and his intended audience. That IS success as an author. I agree. His books were intended for the younger crowd. I liked it, when I was a teen. I will never not like it. Most of this is rubbish.

He obviously did what needed to be done on a higher level than many people out there who write so-called correctly. Of course few actually like to hear that fact so….

Some think Paloni fumbled the ball, but many thousands of others thought and still think differently. You perceived faults that prevented you from enjoying the story, but others did not. If those things were true, we might as well send art critics of all mediums packing. Also, editors. We would have no reason for the Hugos, because all worthy works would have already been rewarded by their own popularity. I agree with you that popular works are clearly doing something right, and often critics overlook that.

Unfortunately, the thing they are doing right is not always what most people consider merit. Furthermore, a book can always be MORE popular. Books can be good in some aspects and terrible in others, having good traits does not mean they are flawless. We have strong reasons for criticizing popular works here at Mythcreants. I could just as easily say that because my critiques of popular works are popular, any flaws you think they have are non-existent.

I completely agree with Orose. I enjoyed reading this series as a teen, and while I do recognize the writing has its flaws, they are overall great books.

His story was imaginative, interesting and connected with the audience, which is really more than a lot of books manage to achieve. This is, however, a blog about writing. And by going over books which made it and look at how they could have been better, people are learning. And that is the main reason for posts like this one. This is disgusting. I am no longer a teenager, but I am still a young aspiring writer.

Writers are supposed to encourage each other. Not discourage. People have widely different skill levels at all ages, but we send young people to 12 years of school and then higher education to refine their writing skills.

I chose him because if somehow he notices I exist and I hurt his feelings, he has money and fans to comfort him. Even Tolkien and Jk Rowling. These kinds of articles are useful, because they allow us to consider the flaws that can have our writing and help to improve it, as amateur author. The question I want answered is how can I be the writer of that next innovative hit novel that everyone else copies?

I really enjoyed this critique! On point? With a great copy editor, Eragon could have been a beautiful piece of fiction. I think aspiring authors like you would be far better off analyzing and trying to learn from the things he did right than focusing on the minute details that do not a story make. Can they improve it and leave authors like you with less to dissect and critique? But even though I myself am not a huge Eragon fan, I have an immense amount of respect for what he accomplished, as should every one of his fellow authors.

Success does not a good work make. How many musicians, artists, film-makers and indeed writers suffer because their work was edged out by some kid who happened to write something popular?

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Criticism serves a big purpose: Eragon reads like it was dashed off to the presses after a lazy scan-read — the publisher was too distracted by the ker-ching noises in his head to actually check the damn thing. A lot of the things which Chris lists in this article are stuff which an editor should have caught and either changed themselves or have sent back to the author to change them. But then, I have read a lot of fan fiction in my life and most of it has about that quality and quite a bit of it is even better , although no professional had a hand in it.

Yes, it found its readers and it was clearly good enough for them. Yes, a good story makes you forget about the plot holes, the bad writing, and the problems with the characters whatever applies. Quite the opposite — this actually shows what a shame it is that someone was sleeping at the wheel. I personally liked the book when I first read it, but something was off.

I think this article really hit the mark on what it was I and many other readers noticed.

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And while you are right about the books success, it could have been so much better if those flaws never made it into the final draft. My husband I both enjoyed the series but I never read it with a critical eye but from a desire simply to enjoy the story.

This article was helpful to me, a 40 something writer, and I look forward to putting the tips to use. Kudos, it was quite enjoyable. Second, thanks for the literary critique.

I can tell you have a good sense of high quality prose and I learned some things myself. Third, how much high quality prose matters really does depend on the writer and their audience. I agree with both sides here, because both are valid in different lights. On the one hand we have lasting classics like Tolkien, who because of his resonate story, experienced prose, and depth of his world building, has a legacy that will outlive us all.

Eragon does not have that. It does, however, entertain its audience. I loved it when I read it as a kid, but going back to read it now, I am rolling my eyes quite a bit. He wrote it for teenagers, and teenagers loved it, so he succeeded similar to Twilight.

It all depends on the perspective of the critic. On another note, Chris, I actually disagreed with some of your critique. Not in the sense of what is quality prose, but in personal taste.

Again, it is all subjective and depending on personal taste, which is why the enormity and diversity of the literary market is a wonderful thing: High quality prose, like wine, is acquired and taught taste. Anyway, keep critiquing, you have great suggestions and experience to share.

Thanks Lydia. Ah, yes. The good old Inheritance Cycle. What a blast from my middle school past.

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He managed to create a series of largely mediocre books that ended up getting a huge fanbase anyway, in spite of their flaws. I think what really gripped me about the books was the plot. Oh, and the dragons. Gotta love the dragons. But in the end, I think what matters is touching the reader in some way. As writer, I place more value in my story and my characters than I do in syntax and logic issues.

Believe me, I do. Make the reader feel… or die. He took a second year to revise the book and then gave it to his parents to read. The family decided to self-publish the book and spent a third year preparing the manuscript for publication: During this time Christopher drew the map for Eragon, as well as the dragon eye for the book cover that now appears inside the Knopf hardcover edition.

The manuscript was sent to press and the first books arrived in November The Paolini family spent the next year promoting the book at libraries, bookstores, and schools in and early Michelle Frey, executive editor at Knopf, contacted Christopher and his family to ask if they might be interested in having Knopf publish Eragon.

The answer was yes, and after another round of editing, Knopf published Eragon in August If the process really went like that, a lot of people slept at the wheel in this case, because a lot of the stuff Chris lists should have been caught by an editor — at least after it was professionally released. Self-publishing is another topic, more can go through there.

Great article. I spent more time on the hate sites and they were negative. But they were also constructive. There were articles about writing and plotting and characterization. There were articles about how to pace a story, how to build worlds, and how to really draw your reader in.

There were articles about what Inheritance was copying. I discovered some of my favorite books through criticism. This kid is a famous writer because his story has heart and soul. No reputable publisher is going to allow a story to go out there unedited. This is meant to be lessons for writers, and Eragon is full of examples of bad writing that other writers — including year-olds — can learn from.

For a book written by a year-old kid, Eragon is exactly what I expect it to be: I agree that Paolini does not have the life experience and emotional maturity to create deeply compelling characters, and it is apparent that though he has access to the tools of the trade, he has not yet learned how to use them effectively. Therefore we get generic descriptions, a rather ridiculous villain, and an implausible and irrelevant prologue.

But hey! So, no, Paolini does not have the years of experience nor taken out the student loans to perfect his craft. I would have enjoyed the books much more if I had been able to see his craft mature. It also would have helped if I had not been able to predict the second book in its entirety. This article is excellent as it points out the flaws prevalent in many young adult novels.

Not to be overly hard on Paolini, but even bad writing can be used to produce informed readers and better writers. I will add one more tiff, this time about publishing companies: I should add that my comments are aimed at the Inheritance series, especially to Eragon, and the age and experience of the author when it was written.

Just have to say. While I thoroughly enjoyed both the critique of Eragon and the book itself I agree that its is poorly written. I however, believe in seeing past the limitations of an author and enjoying the story for what it was meant to be. We are all human and as a teenager this kid wrote a pretty interesting book with a world that he developed.

Just my two cents though. This article is ridiculous. I cannot possibly see how an accurate review of an entire series of books could be made from the prologue of the first novel, and in reality the criticisms come across as petty and nitpicking. This is not a review, though. And by choosing a popular example instead of something more obscure, more people are aware of the full story and can follow the criticism better.

Nobody writes perfectly and, to a degree, a writer needs a second and third and fourth and whatever many more they can get set of eyes on the story. He was 14 and there it is; but he was published lucky chap! I actually quite enjoyed the book though agree it had a few problems. I definitely loved some of his characters. Some years back, I wrote for a newspaper. We were told to keep it to an eight-grade reading level, because basic literacy was at an all-time low at the time.

I understand that fifth-grade is the goal now. Ask the talentless Kardashian clan. The misspelling of squeal was probably a typo I created when copying in the excerpt.

If it was in the book, it has been corrected in more recent versions on Amazon. The substitution of one letter for another of similar size and shape is surprisingly difficult for people to catch. Do people just not pay attention in English lessons? He was 14, wrote a story and it happened to get published. I have been dying for years to see where Paolini goes in the world of writing. We all have those early notebooks we keep hidden. The ones that we cannot read without cringing.

His got published. Wow, I also wonder how publishers publish the badly written stories! Makes you wonder if you were to publish a story through one… And now I also wonder about my stories. My primary issue with this review is one of context, over half the criticisms are accurate only if you take the sentence on its own. The Urgal for example do at first seem exactly like an orc substitute, in the first book at least.

A lesson using a less than optimal first chapter to teach the reader how to do it better. No work is above criticism just because it is famous or well-loved—especially if it was written by a kid.

A lot of kids who read Eragon might be inspired to write a book someday. Do we want them perpetuating the same mistakes, or do we want them to be encouraged to express themselves more clearly and to make their ideas more interesting?

I have to say the series had its flaws as well as shining moments after I read the first book I struggled through the last 3 books. A further point is that and I mean this as polite as possible but at the end of the day he still has a published book that not alot of people, you and I included have not.

Some of the criticism is good, some of it just directly conflicts with the rest of the story, the air of mystery in the next or so pages. He asks questions that are intentionally left unanswered. Elves in this story run incredibly fast, about the same as a normal horse.

The Mortal Instruments series? This is just me, I mean he wrote most of that first book when he was 15 with a bit of help from his sister. Also I got to know: Did you even read the book? Please read the book before you criticize it. Just to point something out: Nobody would have the time, even if they did nothing but read from the moment they are born magically gifted with reading skills to the moment they die not even stopping for a bite to eat or a nap even once. Being 15, 20, or 45 is irrelevant.

It makes no difference to quality, and Eragon is badly written, period. Whether it is successful is no gauge of quality, it just means enough people with some money to spend bought a book with a picture of a dragon on it. And you have no right to dislike the cockroach being in it. And lots of crap books have gotten published. Finally, using lots!!!???? I was really feeling gloomy today and I inadvertently found one of your posts on pinterest.

Like, a lot. You really nit-picked this kids work. This stuff is subjective, and this whole post is condescending and mean-spirited. You can blab all you want about whether or not his writing is good, but the fact of the matter is that it is successful. It obviously resounded with a lot of people. Have you ever made something people like? Media exists to be discussed and analyzed. It would be mean-spirited to write a blog post about an unsuccessful work, but critiquing highly popular media is how we get new and better media.

And, no, the original is not better than this. Like this, by going into omnipresence, you can give the reader a better impression of that enemy the hero will soon be dealing with — a creature seemingly human and harmless, but deadly to all who approach.

P is 33 as of Even at the time I found it derivative and forgettable and I never finished the trilogy. Five years is a good, long time to do multiple rewrites and have it read by multiple editors to make a polished product. I was an aspiring writer when I read the book and his story of success at such a young age did inspire me. He did have a few advantages that others do not, however.

His parents already owned their own publishing company, and he was home-schooled and graduated highschool at This allowed him the freedom to tour across America with his parents they visited over schools and libraries to promote his self-published book.

His books have sold very well but critically they did very poorly across the board. Many terrible things get published and sell incredibly well: Just because something is popular does not mean it is immune to criticism nor does that make them objectively good. K Rowling who knows how to write extremely well. Still, a little remark: When I was 14 which was far longer ago than I want to admit , I already used to read books in the adult section of the local library. Writers have more imagination than non-writers at any rate, artists usually have more imagination than non-artists.

Besides, even though the book was written the first draft, at any rate when the author was 14, he was adult by the time it was really published and took up speed.

It was edited by professionals, who should have know better. Your suggested paragraph substitutions are nearly unreadable and lose my attention.

The best books have them. The first page is the most important in the book, and if you had written the first page as you did, nobody would get past it. Tolkien was a fantastic worldbuilder, terrible writer. Spent a page describing the forest. Say more with less. Eldest and the sequels become a little bit too verbose in my opinion.

Paolini made his mistakes here and there. There is a difference between strong writing and strong storytelling. Storytellers do. Tolkien is still read after fifty years, despite his rather difficult style. I severely doubt Paolini will make it that far or Ms. Meyers or Ms. I would even go so far and say Paolini is over his zenith already.

And his writing is more than just a bit messy. He describes the wrong things and he just glosses over the wrong things, too. In a fantasy story, you put focus on what is new, what is different, what people need to imagine, because they have no reference.

Nobody needs to describe a forest, as long as its a regular one. But he also had a talent for describing action and for creating and filling a world which was interesting to the reader — because he knew what people needed described in detail.

He just sometimes got too carried away with it. He was both a writer and a storyteller. As were other authors which had the staying power. Individuals that use magic often have increased scene capabilities described in future books. For example: Another example: Joker comes to mind with that sentence. But the expression is not helping things along. I agree with Cay. Considering the high bar that Tolkien set and his quote rightly being considered the father of modern fantasy…people sure do like to insult him.

Tolkien was a fantastic writer, storyteller AND world builder. Edit down The Lord of the Rings and even more people would find it accessible today than the millions who still currently do.

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I doubt people will be reading Eragon in years. Even a collected work consisting of small stories and notes pulled together into a narrative The Silmarillion is a better book than most people can ever hope to achieve. One thing I would add, though. Could you possibly do the first chapter of Eragon not the prologue?

Especially Eragon being the only guy bravest to brave the Spine. Seeing as Eragon was written by a 14 year old, as a story that was supposed to be fun, not critically torn apart, it is an amazing story.

If you had read the story with on open mind, and read the entire series, you will realize that this is a wonderful story, and that he gets better as he goes. And, another thing, the prologue was necessary. It tells us what we need to know later on in the story. Maybe, instead of tearing apart the first three pages of his book, you should read the entire story, then come back and tell us what you think.

As mentioned before in the comments: Having been written by a teenager does not make it immune to any and all criticism. Eragon is an amazing story — to 14 year olds, but is poorly written from any other perspective. He clearly had early talent, but that book would never have been published as it was had it not been for his parents.

It certainly was never more than waved at an editor or proof-reader. Yes, some teens are horrible with words, but some are not. Writing quality is not determined by age, but by books read and learned from, as well as experience. The more you write and read, the better you get. Young authors can write well.

And not just by family to you, to prove that young authors can write well, and will, in spite of the people trying to tear them down. This is not against teens who write. This is to make it clear that everyone, even an author with successful, published books still has to grow.

That there are always things to do better. That even a successful book can be mediocre one way or other. Every author makes mistakes and by pointing them out, we can learn.

That is what this whole page is about: If a book is written poorly, it is written poorly. The quality of their writing is. It was about his writing. In fact, Chris made a point in the beginning of the post to point out that, in the published world, all books are open to critique.

This was in no way an attack on all teenage writers. Paolini is not the whole, in the same way that none of the adult authors that the Lessons from Bad Writing posts have dissected are the whole, either. I, too, am a young author trying to get published. I wrote books when I was 14 and I would not care if someone critiqued them.

In fact, I might even be honored, because it shows that people read my book and cared enough to put down their thoughts about it. If it could do so good as to be made into a movie, then surely your book has that capability as well. Age can be polarizing. Your job is to find the value, the grains of truth, and anything that you might be able to use to make your writing better in the critique, and to be brutally honest with yourself about it.

No author in that position ever improved their book or learned from the process. I am always impressed by young authors, but even more so by those who are willing and able to be impressionable, teachable, and more interested in how to make their books better than in defending them for being great already. Also, remember that compliments are not critique, so take them with a grain of salt as well!

Many of the other comments on this post seem to be doing the same. It really, truly is not an attack on you, or even on Paolini. Part of it is just lack of life experience like not knowing that words that are synonyms still have nuances that set them apart, and using the wrong one can have hilarious, probably-unintended implications , part of it is odd stylistic choices seriously, a scent that would change the world?

So I have been doing my editing wrong all these years? I think it pretty much proves that the criticism is not unfounded. Instant damseling, questionable word choice, confusing action, dehumanizing the enemy, incomprehensible magic powers that are setting up contrivance. The article complains about the description of the shade and then proposes a much stronger sentence.

Spending that much time on his description could send mix-signals. This is the most unfounded criticism above. The purpose of this scene was not providing details of the surroundings but rather describing the shades powerful eyesight without overtly saying it. Vibrating is actually quite appropriate giving the context that you learn later in the novel.

It is a huge component of the entire series. Plus remember how much description the elves and that helm got. Is that a spoiler of some sort? The sentence was suggested because this fact could be shown, not told, like Paolini is constantly doing. Again this could have been conveyed better. That was the purpose of that section. As for fluff: Specificity provides detail which is often needed for things like scene setting, foreshadowing, clarifying, etc.

Fluff is restating what was already said or adding things that are unrelated and unnecessary.